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[livejournal.com profile] kernezelda stumped me yesterday with a line from one of my own drabbles. She requested a drabble that answered this question: what if John had been picked up by Aeryn instead of Elack?


Thaw

He's cold to the touch and that makes her angry.

It's the second time she's hauled him out of freefall in space, a speck among debris, but this time there is no burning moon to offer even the semblance of heat, only a newly dead Leviathan that still retains some warmth.

She had ignored the flash at the edge of her sensor range for arns before turning back. If he'd gone back home, that would be the end. It would be clean. It would be irretrievable. In the end she had to know.

It's the second time she's wrestled his dead weight out of his module, but this time his smell is sweet and cold, not iron sharp with bile and blood. His spark flutters and dies as she pulls supplies from her Prowler, cold blood returning to his heart and shocking it still.

She had decided not to board Moya, choosing to pause just inside transmission range only long enough to ask. All she picked up was a small reflective shadow bouncing back an echo of her signal.

It's the second time she's laced her fingers into a ram and battered at his heart, tipped back his head to breathe into his mouth in a parody of a kiss, but this time her heart stops when his begins to pulse.

She and her ship are the best sources of heat to keep him alive, the only things that aren't cooling down to absolute zero. She pulls him into the cockpit and wraps a thermal tarp around them both, forcing herself to hold onto the bitter flesh of his body until he's warm enough to shiver.

Date: 2005-10-05 02:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gigerisgod.livejournal.com
Sounds like you're onto something good. You can keep going, you know :)

Date: 2005-10-05 03:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
It could go either way, but I think Thea would beat me since I'm pretty sure I owe the next relay on our joint project.

Date: 2005-10-05 04:07 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Understood :)

Date: 2005-10-05 05:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thassalia.livejournal.com
I wouldn't beat you since I will never, ever turn down Feldfic.

I might cry though.

Date: 2005-10-05 07:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
Yeah, I figured.

I need to re-read the file though, feel the shape of the wave in order to ride it through. Must get batteries for the PDA, since I can't in good conscience print it out until it's finished.

I'm thinking in about 2-3 days I should have a sizeable volley for you *g*

Date: 2005-10-05 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thassalia.livejournal.com
That is most excellent news:)

Date: 2005-10-05 02:52 pm (UTC)
ext_2366: (by sdwolfpup: smitten)
From: [identity profile] sdwolfpup.livejournal.com
I liked this. It's an intriguing idea, and I love how Aeryn feels stuck having to help him, as she would at this point.

Date: 2005-10-05 03:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
Yes! I wondered if I needed to be more explicit about that sense of being bound, of wanting to be free of it but not ready to decide how permanent that freedom would be; and being snagged back before she even got away.

Date: 2005-10-05 02:57 pm (UTC)
ext_1771: Joe Flanigan looking A-Dorable. (cool j/a)
From: [identity profile] monanotlisa.livejournal.com
Oh, break my heart and mend it at the same time, willya?

Lovely.

Date: 2005-10-05 03:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
*offers big smile and a mug of hot cocoa*

Date: 2005-10-05 03:39 pm (UTC)
ext_1771: Joe Flanigan looking A-Dorable. (relativity)
From: [identity profile] monanotlisa.livejournal.com
Yeah, yeah, you're just trying to lure me back...

In related news, come to my LJ and squee about UR/Kansas/Terra Firma, yes? & :-) Or join the chat about Scorpius and Sikozu!

*beckon*

Date: 2005-10-05 05:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
Yeah, yeah, you're just trying to lure me back...

Yeah, and?

In related news, come to my LJ and squee about UR/Kansas/Terra Firma, yes? & :-) Or join the chat about Scorpius and Sikozu!

Soon!

Date: 2005-10-06 12:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] unwritten-words.livejournal.com
OMG I love that icon. *faints*

Date: 2005-10-06 12:54 am (UTC)
ext_1771: Joe Flanigan looking A-Dorable. (electric girl)
From: [identity profile] monanotlisa.livejournal.com
Snag away! [livejournal.com profile] jenahna made it. (God, I love Relativity so much.)

Date: 2005-10-05 03:05 pm (UTC)
kernezelda: (Lymond penknife)
From: [personal profile] kernezelda
Have I mentioned lately how lovely and fine I find your writing? This hurts for her sake and his, but it's such a relief when he bgins to breathe, even though the future seems nothing but bleak.

bitter flesh of his body
How the memory must burn.

Thank you.

Date: 2005-10-05 03:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
Thank you, Kerne--and you're very welcome as well 8 )

Date: 2005-10-05 03:06 pm (UTC)
kernezelda: (TFAL)
From: [personal profile] kernezelda
ever so slightly bummed

*hugs you tight and gives you cocoa and a fuzzy stuffed critter*

Date: 2005-10-05 03:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
*sips cocoa and snuggles stuffie*

I feel like a sick five year old today, yet I am neither sick nor five.

Date: 2005-10-05 04:06 pm (UTC)
cofax7: climbing on an abbey wall  (Default)
From: [personal profile] cofax7
Oooh, very cool. I like.

Date: 2005-10-05 05:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
Thank you 8 )

Date: 2005-10-05 05:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] danceswithwords.livejournal.com
It's the second time she's wrestled his dead weight out of his module, but this time his smell is sweet and cold, not iron sharp with bile and blood.

I really like the parallel you draw here, how familiar this must feel, how much that must hurt and how much she must resent John for making her go through it again--the very thing she left to avoid--and yet how she just keeps coming back.

Date: 2005-10-05 05:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
*grins* That's it, that's very much it.

Date: 2005-10-05 05:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thassalia.livejournal.com
This is... well, you already know that i'm in awe of your phrasing, of your ability to display these threads and strings, these unspoken things.

She doesn't want to go back, and yet it's not a choice. Duty, on so many levels, those threads that tie her to her obligation.

This is such a great line: "His spark flutters and dies as she pulls supplies from her Prowler, cold blood returning to his heart and shocking it still."

His body a machine, something she look at without feeling, and then she stays because again, it's duty. She is the best of his options.

Gah, I would love to see this continue.

Date: 2005-10-05 08:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rubberneck.livejournal.com
And yet continuing it would make you cry--see how there's no good option there?

but i luuuuv youuuu

Date: 2005-10-05 09:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thassalia.livejournal.com
Sigh. Continue it. You writing always makes me happy - Project 3 or not:)

Date: 2005-10-11 05:19 am (UTC)
kernezelda: (IPIA brief moment)
From: [personal profile] kernezelda
I would love for Thea to cry, not for the sake of it, but because there is new Feldfic.

Date: 2005-10-05 11:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mesascaper.livejournal.com
I love the opening line.
John & aeryn are such great characters and you write them so well. John isn't even awake in this story and he feels right. How do you do that? *g*

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